- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
700 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 00:21:38 ID:HUEH46ak0 - 小説の感想を書いてみたんで添削お願いします
I hadn’t read an English novel except lessons. And the story I had read in classes
was written in plain English, so I always felt it’s only "teaching materials."
I had thought English novels are bothersome because I must have translated them,
and they were not interesting. This novel, however, made my idea about them really different.
At the beginning, this story was full of a hero’s looking back of his memories
and explanations about his furniture, so I thought it bothersome too. But as I read it,
I couldn’t stop my reading. Of course, words were too difficult for me to read it
without a dictionary. I had to fight. But I didn’t feel it’s troublesome. I was absorbed in it.
The most impressible scene is the scene that he left the house and met small man who said
the man is an enemy to ghouls. Before the scene, the hero had stayed the room
of the strange gloomy house, so I felt the scene was very open. Even I thought
he become a person. If you ask me which he wasn’t a person or not before the scene, I can’t answer....
The scene that he encountered ghouls in his room after the above scene was impressive, too.
Because of the little change of his furniture, he lost a confidence that the room is
his own room. I could feel his irritation. I think I couldn’t feel it without the reminding
his past and explanations of furniture in the beginning scene. And, he was controlled
as he was haunted by ghouls. When he came to himself, he was trying the gamble. This moment,
I thought his lose was determined.
Can he find the lost room? I think he can. However, he must fight with ghouls
and he will certainly lose. I think he has to live with such a destiny.
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
701 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 00:28:02 ID:HUEH46ak0 - 内容がないよう
小説の内容が必要でしたら言ってください
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
702 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 00:31:55 ID:HUEH46ak0 - ３パラグラフの最後の行のwhich以降はミスです
or notを消してください
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
703 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 00:33:10 ID:HUEH46ak0 - 連レススマソ
これでラストです
whichをwhetherに変えてください
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
705 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 10:36:31 ID:HUEH46ak0 - >>704
ありがとうございます
その「ちょこちょこ」っていうところを指摘・訂正していただきたいです
ただの趣味程度です
先生と勝負しているんです
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
707 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 19:15:09 ID:HUEH46ak0 - >>706
なるほど
じゃあ、in the beginning scene.のあとに
But for them, I couldn't have imagined those changes imaginatively.
を入れる感じでいいんでしょうか？
具体的なミス（特に時勢のミス）を詳しく教えてほしいんですけどいいですか？
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
709 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 21:10:38 ID:HUEH46ak0 - >>708
ケアレスミスだけですか？
今思っていることは現在、小説を読んでいるときは過去、小説を読む前は過去完了って感じで書いてたんですけどまずかったんですね
感想は現在形なんですね。
日本語の感想文と感覚が違ってムズい…
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- 【英語で】英作文スレ part3 【作文】
711 ：大学への名無しさん[]：2008/11/05(水) 22:04:41 ID:HUEH46ak0 - >>710
俺が書いたのはreviewではなくてreportなんですがね
でも勉強になりました
ありがとうございました
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